Kill the narrator. He talks too much.
You talk too much. (You never shut up.)
Shut up “shuttin’ up.”
(Good for dialog)
I TOLD YOU TO SHUT UP
maybe that;s why dead narrators
tell the best stories?
“…then they kilt me.”
Just relaxing and being yourself
puts you at the head of the pack.
couple on BART overaccessorized,
semi shaved one-dangly-earring depending
boots and a good color scheme – brick red
but faded, glasses like mine, great
profile, leone-cowboy hairdresser
he, she the good yoko, asian master
of western taste, subtleties, nuance,
stars of their own movies but ultimately
not a story i care to tell (so what?)